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In a crowded room, filled with shallow souls,
Notebook and pen my company.
I sat alone, contently on my own
When a Dreamer sat beside me.
An artful mind, personal style, indifferent to the latest trends
That was the day, I had found a friend
And so began our story.



She didn't know she was a Dreamer.
You can tell that she was unaware,
By the way she asked about my thoughts,
When I had thought that no one cared.
She listened to my soft replies, wonder sparkling in her eyes
I pondered what she saw inside
A quiet mouse like me.



She always reminded me she was a Dreamer
Using a brush called "personality"
Painting through life, changing colors, with
Confidence and Bravery.
Splashing emotions onto canvas, she shares her world that I can't see
She put a pen into my hand one day,
And smiled, "Share yours with me?"



She showed me I'm a Dreamer
Unveiling my ability
To make rainbows out of black and white,
Breathing life into my fantasies.
The empty page that blankly stared, as bleak as my life used to be
Was now a door into my mind,
Imagination now my secret key.


She's forgotten how to be a Dreamer
Doubt became her vulnerability.
She gave into the words of narrow minds,
who mocked her creativity.
I watched her wither into a shell, light dimming into gray
She's now the girl alone in the shallow crowd,
Face lifeless and tear-stained.



One day I met a Dreamer,
Who made me who I am.
Taught me I could capture life,
With paper and a pen.
She gave me a reason, gave me a dream, to express my point of view,
Now it's my turn to help her see
That she's a Dreamer too
Something I wrote on a whim. I thought about what it felt like to meet someone who loves a different kind of art, but wanted to see how another one worked.
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AsakoBunny Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Quite interesting. Two different lives/styles meet and become friend easily. It happens a lot more than you think.
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Student Writer
Desu yo nee~? Thank you so much for the feedback and fave!
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AsakoBunny Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome~!
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JeanneyLost Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist
Quite inspiring words. I like it.La la la
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student Writer
Why thank you so much! I'm glad it appealed to you.
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JeanneyLost Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Student General Artist
You´re welcome! :cuddle: remake
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Veyrius Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist
Ahh- I have a friend like that. She always encourages me let loose all my potential. To not hold anything back- but then when I look at her, she indeed, does her stuff with a great deal of emotion- but then when, for example, she receives a harsh comment, she shuts herself off and becomes dead to the world. She is her own worst critic, as we all sometimes are, and the things that she SAYS about her work! You'd feel like someone told her to go burn it or something! It's really, really sad to see such an artistic mind be dulled by the surrounding bleakness of the world.. Sigh- the road we take is a harsh one- filled with people who will hurl stones at us and spit on our trail. But hey, that's just how it goes. It will get better someday- (I hope) Great job, btw.
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
I sympathize with your friend. I used to be like that. She shouldn't shut down. Not for long anyway. She just needs someone to be just as positive as she is when she gets crushed. Amazingly, i found something so beautifully simple that always made me strive to stand when i was on my own. Anime. that thing is like inspirational crack for the soul. That and my English/Literature teachers always believed in me. Growing up, I never really believed in my abilities until I was twelve, but they did. I'm feel like I'm a favorite/good example because they take my work and show it to the kids they teach. Their confidence in me kept me going a long while. So just be that for your friend. And thank you. You may not notice, but I think you just triggered and idea for me to weave around.
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Veyrius Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist
I'm glad you've found some sort of support. :meow: I am lol. But she always picks herself up every time anyways- that's why I admire her so much. She shuts off for a bit- then comes back as strong as ever. Though I doubt she forgets everything though.. :D You are most welcome- may I see it if you ever decide to spin your web, then? :D It'd be awesome to read/see something I've, more or less, inspired someone to make XD
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LoneTaku Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
I honestly had something to say.

Then I read the poem.
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
When you say 'you had something to say', can you please elaborate? Did i give a wrong impression or something? just curious.
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LoneTaku Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student Writer
Oh, uh, sorry. ^^' I'm afraid sometimes I'm a bit less eloquent than I would like to be. I meant to say something along the lines of, "you have left me speechless, here's a medal" but without the sarcasm and lack of capitalization. ^^
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student Writer
Ohhhh. Haha. Well I'm at fault there too. I don't know how I didn't get that. But thank you.
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ObsessedNerdGirl Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's amazing how the roles are switched by the end of the poem. Simply amazing.
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you. Isn't it sweet?
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ayakayasha Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
beautifuly done! :) a great reminder of how wounderfull the world can be if given the chance, but also how fragile the seed of happiness and life can be as well.
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! When I wrote it, the Dreamer wasn't really supposed to turn out that way, but the writer in me thought it would be a better story. Made the message a little more meaningful.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You've woven quite the story! The figurative language you used in this piece really turned some of my ol' writer's gears! 'shallow souls' was just a really nice display of alliteration!

There were also some lines I just fell in love with!

"She put a pen into my hand one day,
And smiled, 'Share yours with me?'"

This just really tickled my mind! The way it's worded to have such a rhythm... I was delighted! The whole idea and how you present it with an almost fragile air? It was brilliant, to me!

The ending was really cute and hopeful too, and I was glad to see it end in a somewhat optimistic way.
Good job! :rose:
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Student Writer
Aw thank you! It was my first poem in a reaaaally long time, been years. I was happy when I ran it by my teacher and I found that I could still write like this. But of course through the gap of those years, I studied poetry. Tedious, but rewarding. And I know! That was one of my favorite lines too, while writing it. I was actually mulling over a rhyming word for that line and just figured, what the hey, put in a dialogue. Makes it cute. And again. Thank you.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Then I think it was a wonderful comeback! Usually if I write after a long break, the first few pieces are utter crap :stare:

I'm glad that you could continue writing again, though, and that you could express yourself in such a poetic way!
You're certainly welcome! :rose:
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You described a very realistic story via your poem. It often happens that there are people unaware of their special abilities, mostly due to their surrounding, full of narrow minded people.

The story described by you has by far a sad ending, but you were able to add also some hope in it. That's very nice.

You made your work so good that I decided to faved this piece.
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
Oh gosh, I've gotten so much feedback from you all I wanna cry. Thank you. I'm so glad it appealed to you. The fact that it comes off as a story and connects to readers makes me wanna run around ecstatically. I really hope this encourages people to show everyone else a little appreciation. And a little hope can create a lot of endings, so I'm glad that worked. Yay~!
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome :D

And I'm glad that I made you so happy :D
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Rouge-Fox Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
Quite a heart warming piece I must say, it has a real circle of life, student becomes the master thing to it which I think is kinda sweet really. Lovely work my friend keep at it.
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
Why thank you! Going through the ups and downs of confidence and doubt, I thought it would be nice to put that feeling into a story, and let the reader imagine their own happy ending for the Dreamers. I also didn't give the narrator a specific gender. So friendship or romance can be interpreted for the reader.
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Rouge-Fox Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
Lovely idea, interpretation is good when reading
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odinify Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
This really created a nice visual story in my mind. It forced me to feel so sorry for the dreamer that withered into the shell. The flow is such a way that creates expectations of how the story goes without leaving the reader biased and so supports itself throughout.
Nice work. I look forward to reading more of your creations.:reading:
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! I'm usually not that skilled in creating visual stories through poetry. So this was an accomplishment for me after not writing poetry for a long time. I'm so glad the flow worked well with you.
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EnthusiasticArtist Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Student Writer
this reminds me of my amazing friends who are very different than me, but inspired me non the less brilliant work!
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I just felt that a lot of people should see that even though they may think they do nothing, they do make a change. I personally feel that way a lot. I hear so many things that people around me do. Modeling, songwriting, choreography for pep performances and wonder what I do. So I just focus on the little things and I c that its not so bad.
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EnthusiasticArtist Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Student Writer
your welcome! that's something I really wish people knew too! I want to change the world even the little bit around me.
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rowanasabredancer Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well written.
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UndiscoveredMuse Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much! That actually means a lot to me.
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rowanasabredancer Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :) I really enjoyed reading it. The usages of rhymes flowed nicely too.
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